[Malrennan's Fall] Rewrite, chapter 1 14-17

[esperesa]

This again. Still building up to the part where I was before I got the rewrite urge.

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Warning for naked man-arse (no bits).









Do poke me if I somehow got that Russian wrong.

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[maaron]

Gorgeous,gorgeous,gorge-gorge-gorgeous!!!!

[esperesa]

It always means a lot to hear that from you! :D

[iosiren]

stunning <3

[esperesa]

<3<3

[(Anonymous)]

Fantastic!

[esperesa]

Thank you! <3

[sessions-studiotime.blogspot.com]

HAHA I love his attitude! What a fantastic line (one I'd love to use but could never pull off). No indeed, the person you have reached is not Marwood. Priceless!

I am just swooning over what you've done visually. You always come up with the most astonishing works of art. I'm dying to know what that horizontal line of light is. I've never seen it used anyplace else, and it works so perfectly in that glossy, glamorous hotel room with the disk sitting there next to the ipod. Including the musical notes was genius, kind of fourth wall fantastic.

[esperesa]

Hah, I thought the scene needed an anticlimax after all the glamour shots. XD

The light is just a Photoshop effect, unfortunately. It kept catching my eye in the Mass Effect 2 game and and I'd been dying to use something like it on a sim picture at some point.

Thank you so much for the feedback, I really appreciate it! <3

[ladybird]

Your decoration skills are just outstanding. And your russian is ok, too. ;)

[esperesa]

Thank you! Haha, glad to hear it - it would have been sad if I'd made a mistake in that short little sentence. xD

[lovelyxwow]

I can see so much in this scene. Very nice!!

Flawless editing, as always. Every picture is stunning!!!

[esperesa]

Thanks Jess! I try my best. :D

[(Anonymous)]

May I ask where you got the bed depicted in the background during the phone conversation? It's gorgeous.

Can't wait for the next installment!

[esperesa]

It's from Adele's Xavier set. The blanket is by Simplan-X (I think this file, edited to pick up Maxis bedding textures) and the pillows are from n-a-n-u's Mao set at TSR (available at the Booty). This was just a simple recolour to fit this particular room.

I'll try my best to update in a timely fashion! :D

[(Anonymous)]

/stays lurking in the shadows until the next update

Your storytelling techniques are truly captivating. I never got to have a look at the previous version of the plot but this rewrite I'm certainly enjoying.

Thanks a bunch for being so helpful with the WCIF, too. Not everyone would bother. :)

Мамадорогая!

[aglaya]

Ух ты!
Oups...
I mean it's cool!
And who wrote that it is not strong in Russian
Poke: You made ​​a mistake the first time, in cloud. Е and Э different letters.

So... He Russian?

Re: Мамадорогая!

[esperesa]

Спасибо! I only know standard words and sentences, but I find it such an interesting language. <3
Ah yes, the text in the cloud is in the Latin alphabet. I wasn't sure what to put there - the translation, the words in Cyrillic or the romanized words - but decided to go with the latter.

Yes, he is! He is supposed to be of Russian/Chinese descent.

Thank you so much for the feedback! :D

Re: Мамадорогая!

[aglaya]

How interesting!
And why only supposed to?

Had not read before so now do not understand a lot. But... Intriguing. It is very intriguing.
Thank YOU! Very very much!

Hello

[(Anonymous)]

where can I find those glasses on the table?

[azzy]

Loved it before, love it now =)

[syrosis]

This is just stunning, I have to say! I can't wait for more!

[bolob]

I remember this story from a long time ago, but this is wonderfully done. I like how it's somewhat between a comic and a manga. The characters are very interesting and I love your placement of everything. Absolutely beautiful :D

[esperesa]

Ahah, true, it's been going on for quite some time now. Thank you for the feedback! :D